13.2.11
this is an example of truly rich, intense but constrained work -- a broken poem, an amputated dream. in task 1, the unpacking of of unfinished sympathy is pleasure to explore. very clinical and well executed. it's wonderful to see what is a linear, horizontal action being taken into an overhead dissected street shot. nice touch of point 8 to contextualize the graphic. the drawings speak for themselves and the legend gives an even magnificent layered residue. the only thing missing is the author's position in all this. where is your opinion? your voice? something to guide us through to what we are seeing? the same comments are applicable to protection. don’t stop at describing, move to analysis and then say something to then say something else. task 2 are incredible illustrations which, unfortunately remain incredible illustrations. the graphics need text, context and . . . and . . . and . . . more. a map from point a to point b was the exercise. get there. both sheets need to talk to each other and reinforce the same story. that being said, this is the genesis of very good work. let us hope the momentum is not lost or distracted.